Intro 1
Walking into a bar you can usually see
all kinds of people. Sports fans, artists, teachers, tall people,
short people, black, white, Hispanic, shy people, loud and obnoxious
people. Well, when you work in a small town bar we don't have the
pleasure of seeing such a variety. We have the usual’s. Same ol'
people that walk through our doors every week, sometimes everyday.
This will consist of Cougars, Pigs, and The Domestic house cats
Intro 2
If I go out of town for a drink I
expect to see many different types of people. The bartenders are
male and female. The Customers are different races, different ages.
Some have tattoos and piercings. Others are a bit plain looking.
Some look like bitches, or assholes. Some of course usually are.
There's a complete variety out there. If I go for a drink in my home
town, it's a complete turn around. All female bartenders for a
start. As for the customers, well I see the same three types day in
and day out. You've got the Cougars, the Pigs, and the Domestic
house cats.
This would hook better if we know your personal authority for this piece. It's not that you're a barfly! YOu're a bartender, right? But your reader does not know that and so you miss a chance to establish yourself in the essay.
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