I read the first
too example cause essays. The first one about love, and how it ends
was well written and detailed, but I couldn't help but think “what
a crazy women”. One because of the story of her own faults, but two
for being so courageous as to share such an intimate example of
failing at love. I'm not sure if I could find such a strong part in
me to want to share something like that with anyone but myself and my
closest friends. The second story I could relate with. I took dance
when I was younger, and was a frequent quitter. In fact I never made
it to my first dance recital. But her writing made me smile. This
kind of writing that's personable, and gives the reader something to
relate to is what I'd like to be able to do. I think to some degree
I can already accomplish it, but I need to work on it more. The third essay
I didn't bother reading for two reasons. One being I don't care for
baseball, or sports in general. The other being the set up. No
breaks, no graphs, just on big bundle of words and just glancing at
it gave me a headache.
I think the graf breaks and format got lost in translation--I'll see if I can fix that.
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